stylistic beta needed

[dueltastic]

Hello! I'm writing my first Avatar fic. And, as the series is on my usual beta's viewing list, I don't want to spoil her. After I got a few thousand words in, I was comfortable flying without a net on this one, but then yesterday I hit a snag: it passed 10k words, which is the point where I lose a sense of whether I've got consistent characterization and prose style and, without fail, start to strongly suspect the whole thing's gone off the rails in some undefinable fashion.

So I need a beta. Half to find style problems, half to hand-hold while I have length issues.

The fic:

• It's Kanna-centric. So far, it features every White Lotus member to some degree, and a chunk of the Water Tribe. Cast of... not quite thousands, but, y'know, a lot.
• It's het. Not explicit, quite PG. (Although it might get bumped up to a PG-13/R before I'm done, I haven't decided. It works at PG, but there are characterization notes that'd be easier to hit at light R.)
• Slight fix-it of canon going on. I found Pakku's redemption and reward sort of glib, personally, but there's no character-bashing.

The beta:

• The good news: I don't need a big detailed SPAG beta. The bad news: what I'm looking for is sort of abstract and subjective. In longer works, I feel my characterization wavering between overly-convenient-feeling and authentic-feeling, and my prose style going inconsistent.
• It's at 12k now, probably will hit 14-15k. I'd like to get it read now, to find out how big a course correction I need to make. (What's missing is a few transitions and places where it needs something for rhythm or pace, so the full fic through the end is there, but the flow needs a little structural support.)
• The problems as I see them: There's a scene I have real doubts about. I see some style shifts, some places that feel a bit choppy as a result. 5k words ago, I thought the characterization was basically good, and now I simply can't tell; hands in the air, WTF am I even doing anymore, that sort of thing.
• Telling me what's working well would also be very helpful; as I write, I tend to slowly reshape it all to conform with the things that I think are working best.

Any kind volunteers?

ETA: Generous volunteer located!

Comments

[attackfish]

I might be willing to give it a look.

[dueltastic]

Thank you!